Sumi H. Inkblot

Yo, you're askin' the wrong person for a lyrics 'tique, Woz. ;) The only thing I can comment on, not belonging to a band or a writer of music, is ...

The computer ate my review! This was a great chapter, I was glad to see Lyla finally mustered the courage to use the Internet. ^_^ Hmmm...a few things: -- She's ...

Welcome to the YWS! It's the custom here to review two other pieces before posting your own, so please keep that in mind before posting any more of your work. ...

:backtotopic: OK, I think the tangent has gone a bit far. If you want to discuss these other books, by all means make a thread for them, but, here, do ...

Hi Woz! The first thing I noticed was your rhyming scheme, and overall, I think it kind of weakened the impact of the poem. The rhymes are too far apart ...

I can sum this entire poem up in one word: Bland. I didn't like it at all: the idea is overused, the rhythm is virtually nonexistent, and it just sounds ...

1. Infodummmmmp! Get rid of that nasty description and give us some clear images. I was puzzled from the get-go, but this is just confuzzling. Also, you use too much ...

Hellooooooooooo, Woz! :D Well, everybody's basically caught all the obvious stuff, so this is just a pikthru. 1. "Receptionist". If she's selling something, "clerk" would be the more viable term. ...

Arrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrris! How art thou? This story has an interesting premise, but some of the execution needs working on. So, what have we got: A perky little town, a swarm of ...

I think it gives potential because how she wants to be beautiful like a rose. The grammar could use some work but the on the emotional side of things it ...

You know, the longer this story runs, the farther apart the parts are and the better they become. >.

Welcome to the YWS! I'm Sumi, and you can PM me anytime you have any questions on the forum. First off, it's common courtesy here to write at least two ...

Here I am, after a week! Sorry about that. Just my stupid procrastination goin' on... I actually read it when I got the PM, didn't have enough time to comment. ...

Welcome to the YWS! Firstly, it's common courtesy here to critique at least two pieces of other's work before posting your own, and keeping that ratio; it's what makes the ...

You asked me to rip it to shreds, but this is good; nothing major to rip at. In fact, I'm a bit confused by the entire thing. But that's just ...